We are again
Hurt, disappointment
wound shy of
the deep dermis of us.
It was me
hoping it would die.
Guppy on dry counter
flailing, gulping at
water not there.

It floundered
til I found I
couldn’t stand it
put it back in water.

So here we are, you
swimming in oblivion
to your almost demise, me
looking in, feeding


© 2011 Shari Lynne Smothers

#2 for day 2 of National Poetry Month. I thought about titling this poem, IT IS WHAT IT IS, but that’s way overworked. MELANCHOLY was sadder than the poem felt or was meant to be. LACKLUSTER seemed to cover what I intended. You may not hear it, but for me lackluster seemed to draw in and accentuate the irony, like ‘just friends.’ You know, because there’s really nothing just about true friends, right?

If I choose to revisit this, to revise it, the title will likely be one of the first things I look at. Among other poetical aspects, titles will likely always give me pause.

About Shari Smothers

Welcome to Telling Stories, my creative writing space. My name is Shari Smothers. Poems help me to understand the world and to explain my world to others. They're my premier story telling tools. There's more to come, so please share with me through reading, commenting, emailing. Learn more about Shari here. And do come again!

7 thoughts on “Lackluster

  1. I think the title “LackLuster” fits this piece perfectly. The situation you talk about is bad but it doesn’t seem like it’s not redeemable. I love your poems. Their always straight and to the point.

  2. I appreciate your take on my scenario, especially with the writing you do involving relationships. Speaking of which, since I’m breathing a bit this weekend, I will be catching up on your fiction. Thanks so much, Susie!

  3. Shari, it can happen with friends and true friends are so hard to find. This a well-paced piece.

    btw nice to see you are joining in napo!

  4. Hi, Pamela. You know, I wouldn’t miss the excitement, even if I were just reading through. Thanks for the comment.

  5. I have been in this place where a mended fence seemed rather awkward standing against the wind. Thank you!

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