Poem Starting with a Line from Norman Dubie

The pearl slapdash of the moon is on the water
here in my corner of the universe.
A huge place its size is completely belied by this
relatively narrow sliver I can see.
How many people I wonder are watching
this same beam I eye
only from a different perspective.

I think of you often grandmother
and more so on clear moonlit nights such as this.
The offhanded manner you loved me in
as a matter of course, like breathing,
of course it had to happen. I hear the moon song
you sang in homage to the light stream that
captivated us, driving or wherever it caught us.

What I wonder tonight as I sit basking,
awash in our pearlescent moon glow
in my corner of the universe, is
if in your corner, is your countenance
likewise awash and therein imbued with thoughts
memories of how much I loved you back.

© 2010 Shari Lynne Smothers

This poem is for the napowrimo prompt #13, smoke a dubie. Visit the post to see the details of this prompt.

  • honoredebalzac

    Shari,
    I like this a lot! Well done!
    Pamela

  • Robin

    Very touching and beautiful! Like your repeated use of certain words…nice flow to this.

  • http://in-the-stream.blogspot.com/ Francis Scudellari

    Staring at the same moon, and using the same first line. I like the very personal touch of the ending.

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Cara:
    Thank you for your response. I really wanted to have that connected circle sense. Good to know it worked. I'm glad you liked it. And I appreciate you visiting my site.
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Pamela:
    Thanks very much! I really appreciate it. Thanks for stopping by.
    Always a pleasure,
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Robin:
    Thanks for your response. I like repetition to bring in a sense of connectedness for me. I'm glad it wasn't off-putting.

    Thanks for visiting,
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Hi Francis:
    Always a pleasure to see you! Thanks so much for connecting through the moon! And the first line too? Common threads are so interesting, I think. I'm glad you like it.

    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Bill:
    You're welcome! I am rather pleased with this one. And I appreciate your taking the time to leave a response. Thank you for visiting my site.

    Shari

  • http://caraholman.wordpress.com/ Cara Holman

    Lovely! I especially liked the way the grandmother loved “as a matter of course, like breathing” and the phrase “awash in our pearlescent moon glow”. That ties back nicely into the first line. Well done!

  • honoredebalzac

    Shari,
    I like this a lot! Well done!
    Pamela

  • Robin

    Very touching and beautiful! Like your repeated use of certain words…nice flow to this.

  • http://in-the-stream.blogspot.com/ Francis Scudellari

    Staring at the same moon, and using the same first line. I like the very personal touch of the ending.

  • Bill

    Thank You! Very well done and you should be very happy with this.

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Cara:
    Thank you for your response. I really wanted to have that connected circle sense. Good to know it worked. I'm glad you liked it. And I appreciate you visiting my site.
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Pamela:
    Thanks very much! I really appreciate it. Thanks for stopping by.
    Always a pleasure,
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Robin:
    Thanks for your response. I like repetition to bring in a sense of connectedness for me. I'm glad it wasn't off-putting.

    Thanks for visiting,
    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Hi Francis:
    Always a pleasure to see you! Thanks so much for connecting through the moon! And the first line too? Common threads are so interesting, I think. I'm glad you like it.

    Shari

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Bill:
    You're welcome! I am rather pleased with this one. And I appreciate your taking the time to leave a response. Thank you for visiting my site.

    Shari

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