Beneath the Façade

The riders at night enjoyed
ferns and flowers in their car
and were served smooth beverages
in the shiniest clear plastic
creating the finest ambiance.

The magenta strumpet of the
midnight motor-coach tour
made a furtive fumble of her
tainted turquoise ‘kerchief
to get one man’s attention.

And as could be guessed
the gent of the nightly ride
wearing manners nonpareil,
his costume soot blackened
softened in the mist,
recovered her cloth from his
drinking cup, as he
casually exclaimed “Oh, f—!”

© 2010 Shari Lynne Smothers

Prompt: #118 Digging. Wordle offered by Barbara, Nicole, Marian V., Mark S. and Rallentanda, at Read Write Poem. Pick as many (or few) of these words as you want and write a poem using them.

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Wordle: read write poem prompt 118

  • http://poemblaze.wordpress.com/ Matt

    A fun ending to the poem!

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks Matt. And I'm sure I don't know what brought me to that! It just seemed crassly fitting. I should be concerned at how quickly it came to mind.

  • http://image-verse.com/ rob

    Shari, you made me laugh, then smile – I liked this…
    …rob
    Image & Verse

  • http://www.zouxzoux.wordpress.com/ Zouxzoux

    Such tranquil words then BAM! – I didn't see the ending coming. Bravo! I love it!

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks for saying so, Rob.

  • honoredebalzac

    Shari,
    This is fantastic! Nice!
    Pamela

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks so much for saying so. I had fun with it.

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks Pamela. I appreciate your saying so.

  • http://briarcat.wordpress.com/ barbara

    Good fun.
    The casual earthiness of the final (truncated) word wins me over. Right word in the right place.

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks so much for your feedback. I'm glad you like it. Yes, the last word had to be left open. Filling it in with any word or phrase would have been far to limiting.

  • http://firsttumblewords.blogspot.com/ Tumblewords

    Ah, well, yes! And wouldn't he??! A fun read!

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks for visiting. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

  • Rob

    great ending, big smile on me!

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks for visiting, Rob. I'm glad it brought a smile to your face.

  • Rob

    great ending, big smile on me!

  • http://slstellingstories.com Shari Smothers

    Thanks for visiting, Rob. I'm glad it brought a smile to your face.

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